2013年6月四级写作真题点评

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第二部分:例文写作与模板对比

第一段:描述图片+说明现象

As we can see from the picture,there are two persons, debating about the importance of doing small things before undertaking something big, who are a father and his son. Recently, the issue of the importance of doing small things has aroused wide concern among the public. Especially the young generation living in the big cities, they tend to do the big ones firstly, paying no attention to the fact that this behavior may pose underlying threat to their precious life and may even endanger others.

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Nowadays/recently, the phenomenon/ issue of …… has arouse wide concern among the public. Especially the young generation living in the big cities/metropolis, they tend to do sth, ignoring/paying no attention to the fact that this behavior may pose underlying threat to their precious life and may even endanger others.

第二段:观点讨论

Does anyone claim the same attitude towards this issue?Definitely not,actually,opinions vary from person to person.Some maintain that the doing some big is beneficial to students.However,quite a few people hold the opposite opinion that the doing some big is detrimental to the youngsters, and they think that the merits of students’ doing some small things far outweigh its demerits.To my way of thinking,we should know the the importance that why we must do small things before we undertake something big. If we know the significance,we will choice the right way and do the right things.

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Does anyone maintain/claim the same attitude towards this issue/phenomenon? Definitely not,actually/in fact,opinions vary from person to person.Some maintain/argue/hold/claim that something is beneficial to sth.However,quite a few people hold the opposite opinion that something is detrimental to sth .The demerits/disadvantages of sth. far outweigh its merits/advantages.